This is my story about my weekend

TITLE: Meeting my Nana tilly

Planning

1.Driving down to my nan

2.Saying ’HELLO’

3.Had lunch

4.Saying goodbye

5.Had dinner

Writing

‘Yay’ I jumped in the air for excitement.I couldn’t wait to see my 94 year old Nan Tilly.We drove to my Nana Jill's and I fell asleep on the way.It felt liked I time traveled like the movie doctor who. We finally got to my Nan's house I dashed up the stairs excited to see my nana tilly.I haven't seen my nana tilly in like 1 and a half years I've been begging my mum and dad just to go see her,But I guess this was the year.

I gave her a big hug and also a little kiss.I Had to help her around the house I also made her lunch I wanted this day to be perfect.I sat next to her and told her that Bayleigh and Jaydenn they are doing good.Me and my Mum started making lunch for everyone elas.Mum made some chiken and I made some Saleds.

We called my dad and my grandad to the table.I handed the plates out and everyone dug in.I got My nana tilly a bun cut in four squares with healthy stuff in it.Also some grapes.My nana stared to eat up and I gave her a heathy drinkI started to munch up chinkin in a bun.

My aunty came to come pick my nana tilly I said goodbye and gave her another big huge I was really hoping I can see her again one day.I walked down the stairs to help her into the car. “Bye nan love you,”I mumbled.I walked back up the stairs and fell asleep on the couch.I had the most weirdest dream ever.I was in a magical winter wonderland there was talking gingerbread.But sadly that ended because my ‘DAD’ chucked my fat head jonty on me to wake me up because it was dinner time.

I sat at the table waiting for dinner and there was chicken again ‘YUM’ we had salads and my ‘FAVOURITE’ Icecream for desert with an extra topping ‘CHOCOLATE SAUCE.I quickly swallowed and munched down my dinner so I can eat my ‘YUMMY’ dessert I was sooo excited. I was almost finished my Ice Cream But I got a really cold ‘BRAINFREEZE’It was like getting your tongue stuck to  icicle but I slowly got rid of it.It was time to go back home I said goodbye to my nana jill and my grandad I carred my dogs to the truck then I hopped in the car and my dad beebed at my nana to say goodbye I fell aslepp.Then I feel asleep on the way home.            

Marking

Ideas Te Aroha	Points	Comment
	4	I like how you put brain freeze in a different font
Miss Baker Me	4 4	You have lots of ideas and detail about what happened.